Which Logline?

by christypaul2013

I’m not even sure either logline is acceptable, but I need one, so…

First, the more traditional approach:

A. When a friend is murdered, a ladies-man cop must sacrifice his pride, his reputation and his apartment to solve the case with the only witness, a dog. 

And the one I’m not sure is even in logline format:

B. A ladies-man police officer inherits a puppy of a partner, a horse of a dog and a bitch of a case, all in two days.

I want the logline to catch attention, but I don’t want people to spit on me because of incorrect format… : (

In my personal life: I just got back from Joshua Tree. I prefer Big Basin. I’m thinking about going on a fast. 

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